You have taken a good leap forward in this exercise despite the fact that you feel as if it was the most challenging assignment- well- done.
You have completed all that was required of you. Many of your drawings have reached a deeper level of observation. Experimentation is clearly visible – and evidence that you have purposely ignored your comfort zone and voyaged into unknown territory is becoming clear.
I would suggest that you redo one of the exercises – just because I am positive that you can improve on the final drawing that you have submitted.
Assessment potential – After assignment 4
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I understand your aim is to go for the Painting/Textiles/Creative Arts*) Degree and that you plan to submit your work for assessment at the end of this course. From the work you have shown in this assignment, and providing you commit yourself to the course, I suggest that you are likely to be successful in the assessment.
I do believe that you will be successful if you decide to submit your work for formal assessment.
Good selection of work is of great importance- so do consult the student advice from the OCA on this subject.
Feedback on assignment
You technical skills have progressed well in this assignment. You have explored different mark making.
This has a vitality and a freedom to it.
Your self- portraits show good understanding of the face. In one you look as if you have a round face – in others you appear to have quite a long face- however it is the positioning of your head I think that makes this noticeable. Perhaps it is the media that you choose which changes your interpretation. You have worked hard on these sketches. You have investigated the structure of the face and searched for different positions – often quite hard angles. You have broken down the detail of the face and created different shapes.
The portrait research sketch has interesting possibilities – you have taken a step away from imitation and taken your investigations into a different way of perceiving the face. I would have liked to have seen the same collage experiments continue throughout the whole drawing so you built up the form using the strips of paper to completion.
Your many sketches and more intense drawings of the male form evidence a persistence which is to be admired. You can capture a pose and you can grasp such elements as balance and proportion.
Exercise 11- A lovely line drawing of the child on a chair.-but maybe a variety to the type of line might have introduced a more interesting and creative element?—- Do try and be discriminating between strengths of line opposed to areas of the design that is noticeably weaker and therefore requires a softer line.
There are some very sensitive areas in this image. In this drawing you have succeeded also to give form and a feeling of solidity to the form. There is a tranquil feeling to the pose- and you have taken your observation to a more intense level to achieve this.
You have produced a very strong portrait. There is real form- real drama to this face. You have included different – very inventive media which works well. There is an understanding of light – reflected light and you have captured the expression well. The addition of different media result in a creative result- a more inventive and adventurous way of seeing.
I do feel that you are capable of producing a better result to this exercise. You do need to observe more pictorial issues which will strengthen this exercise. You need to be braver to produce a more creative drawing.
For instance – I do think that using complementary colors and perhaps not using black would have created a richer feel to the composition. Perhaps enlarging the image would have produced a stronger result too. It would have forced you to consider the relationship of the objects to the edges of the paper.
You need to study the effect of shadow on your arrangement. You are capable of producing stronger work. Do consider this option of redoing this exercise.
The three dimensional feel to the fabric is missing- the tones are too few. The shoes do not seem to be part of the image. There would be clear indication of the shapes of the chair underneath the fabric- you would be able to describe the planes – the solid back of the wooden frame would be more apparent. The light would change. There is not enough investigation into the shapes – weight – tones of the folds and how they fall onto the chair and how they follow the shape of the chair.
I do hope that you can see this
The small pencil sketches of folds could also be taken further- perhaps using a 4B pencil might force you to commit yourself to the darker tones? Try and observe the folds as abstract shapes that break the surface of the paper so forcing the viewer to see them differently. Isolating parts of the fabric and enclosing them within a rectangle encourages you to distance yourself from just describing the fabric. You can capitalize on this isolated square to look at the fabric in a different way.
Your technical skills have improved with this exercise but do persist further in applying your craftsmanship to more experimental interpretations- more creative ways of seeing. Keep up what you have already started.
You have completed much research into the human form using the still life model. You also have included individual studies of shoes – and explored different parts of the body to a more intense degree.
I wonder if you are still exploring your own personal voice by sketching subject matter not prescribed by the OCA?
Learning Logs or Blogs/Critical essays
Your writings are again- thorough and honest. Sometimes I am aware of a lack of confidence and a wariness towards some of the work. This will go as your skills improve. You reflect well and analyze your reactions to the work.
You obviously gain much from the study of other artists which is all to the good.
Your blog is clear – well written and easily accessible.
Suggested reading/viewing –
Do now study the OCA guidelines for the formal submission. Remember it is not the amount of work that is important – it is the selection that matters.
Have a look at the work of Giacometti- particularly his drawings. Also the drawings of Jose Clemente Orozo- Max Beckman- Degas.
These artist produced strong images by reduction of tones- they produced dramatic drawings by – often just isolating strong light and combined them with strong shadows. Try and be less tentative about your creativity. Be bolder and more adventurous. Subtlety and delicacy has its place of course- but you must keep experimenting and pushing the boundaries.
Pointers for the next assignment
Do redo the still life with the fabric.
If you intend to take the landscape option then have a look at the work of Edward Hopper- Cezanne and Monet.
Make sure that when you complete the preliminary studies for your final drawing – enclose them within a rectangle that is in the same proportion as the final drawing. In that way your understanding of the reason for the experimentation with composition- balance – harmony is clear and well understood.
The exercise numbers match up to the numbers I ascribed to post the pictures, not actual exercise numbers